There are many ways of saying goodbye to a lover - looking at the words I'm not sure why this feels like a sad goodbye, rather than one langourous and grateful for the night past. Was that your intention in writing it, Michelle?
oooh, nicely done, I'm picturing her standing about surrounded by sunlight and staring up at the sky, smiling while saying goodbye, it doesn't seem sad to me
Lirone When I was younger I used to see the sun rays shining through the clouds and I always felt that someone had died and gone to Heaven. I hope in some small measure I conveyed this. Thanks to you, JC and Wordcrafter for commenting on my first poem in a while. Hope you're having a nice day.
welcome to Naquillity Photography... may you thrive in this natural habitat of poetic and photographic moments from nature... take my hand and share the intricate threads along which i journey... hopefully you'll get lost somewhere between grey & emotion~
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Michelle...wow. This is so bittersweet yet beautiful, lyrical.
I love the tension in the "lingering" between one extreme and the other. Lovely.
There are many ways of saying goodbye to a lover - looking at the words I'm not sure why this feels like a sad goodbye, rather than one langourous and grateful for the night past. Was that your intention in writing it, Michelle?
Very beautiful mood, anyway!
I like the way you've placed her somewhere in the natural cycle. 'Heaven's rhythm is idle' is a lovely line.
Sorry that I haven't been round much lately. I'm just catching up on visits.
oooh, nicely done, I'm picturing her standing about surrounded by sunlight and staring up at the sky, smiling while saying goodbye, it doesn't seem sad to me
a beautiful moment inbetween... welcome back to writing...
Lirone When I was younger I used to see the sun rays shining through the clouds and I always felt that someone had died and gone to Heaven. I hope in some small measure I conveyed this. Thanks to you, JC and Wordcrafter for commenting on my first poem in a while. Hope you're having a nice day.
July 11, 2008 at 1:57 PM
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