The Pane
Wasps stung my paned face as they flew
Initially from the burning glass. Poco a poco
Needling birds addle themselves beneath my silled
Door. A very loud knock came stern
On my windowside. It was a sparrow without an alibi.
Wincing at this new pockmark, I felt a warm breeze grow.
I used window as a beginning/ ending acrostic so that it would resemble a closed window from the left side and an open window from the right side. Have a nice night~
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paisley said...
very cleverly done michelle...
Wednesday, April 16, 2008
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Blogger lissa said...
I like that idea of openings and closing of the window, and I like the viewpoint, very visual and vivid
Wednesday, April 16, 2008
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Blogger Noah the Great said...
Awesome. I don't usually give away when I hide words in my writing.
Wednesday, April 16, 2008
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Blogger Leigh Lear said...
nicely done, interesting way to do it.
Wednesday, April 16, 2008
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Blogger Greyscale Territory said...
What a clever way to capture the opening and closing dimensions of a window.
Gemma
Thursday, April 17, 2008
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Anonymous Pam said...
Very clever. I would have never thought to mirror the letters at the beginning and ending of the lines.
Thursday, April 17, 2008
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Anonymous watermaid said...
Wow! I'm impressed - a creative take on the promp, two acrostics (one of them reversed) and an open and a closed window.
Thursday, April 17, 2008
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Blogger charlotta-love said...
I've never seen the word written down the front and up the back. Nice!
Thursday, April 17, 2008
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Blogger T.R. said...
beautiful!! "sparrow without an alibi" fantastic.
Friday, April 18, 2008
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Blogger Karina said...
Wow...that's pretty impressive! I'm not sure I would have been able to do something like this...too much structure in poetry tends to block my muse. I love it, I just can't seem to make it work for me.
Friday, April 18, 2008
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Blogger Just someone said...
nice! the reversed acrostic is brilliant!
I tried it too - the acrostic style.
Saturday, April 19, 2008
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