tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3023314515424268756.post3207954879828255905..comments2023-05-08T05:36:44.769-04:00Comments on Naquillity: mosaic moonNaquillityhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04784964201596357136noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3023314515424268756.post-86370437332948011802014-05-07T15:30:40.975-04:002014-05-07T15:30:40.975-04:00tumblewords said...
Nice. The way you brought the...tumblewords said...<br /><br />Nice. The way you brought the first stanza back to the last stanza is interesting. There are some fine phrases in this that cover the hard cast similes.<br /><br />Friday, February 01, 2008<br />Delete<br />OpenID mariacristina said...<br /><br />This poem is so rich in emotion, narrative, and image.<br /><br />I love this stanza:<br /><br />your backbone rigid like<br />the KY mountains you used to climb,<br />aches as you lean over the vivid canvas.<br />colors are spinning inside your head<br />similar to the bicycle<br />careening down the hill like a child's cartwheels.<br /><br />Friday, February 01, 2008<br />Delete<br />Blogger paisley said...<br /><br />you did a great job with this michelle... i think this challenge was well suited to your poetic style,, i on the other hand lean more heavily on the literal,, and found it nearly impossible to integrate the phrases logically....<br /><br />Saturday, February 02, 2008<br />Delete<br />Blogger susan said...<br /><br />Hi Michelle,<br /><br />Thanks for participating. Kudos on creating a cohesive story and completing many of the similes beautifully. What tripped me up though was your speaker referring to herself as she and her. I realize the phrases required these pronouns, but maybe you could have written two characters. Or did I misread? This is an early impression and I read several times to get greater understanding.<br /><br />Do check back tomorrow. I'll talk more about the purpose of the exercise and then we'll move forward.<br /><br />Saturday, February 02, 2008<br />Delete<br />Blogger T.R. said...<br /><br />Today I post a photo inspired by your moon poem. It does not do it justice. That poem is stunning.<br /><br />Wednesday, February 06, 2008<br />Delete<br />Anonymous Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...<br /><br />This is fascinating, MIchelle.<br /><br />July 4, 2008 at 9:14 PMNaquillityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04784964201596357136noreply@blogger.com